Sunday, September 02, 2012

Trapped(55 fiction)

Fear gripped her heart as Maya looked at the masked people she was surrounded with.’ Oh my God! What have I landed myself in!’ she exclaimed. Before she could react one of those masked people gave her something after which she didn’t remember anything. Maya lay there helplessly as the doctors began her appendicitis surgery.


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  1. Appendicitis? Cut the suker.

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    1. :)

      Yup! This might heal her health wise, but her fear and the feeling of being trapped will not be healed.

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  2. Ok my views- There are few situation where we afraid and trapped in it. This is totally wrong. One should over come the fear. My brother had his operation and we all told him that everything will go fine if only he will calm himself. Nothing is going to happen and no one let anything to happen. Just do not fear. We told him in a different way so that he never panics. We were smiling laughing, pulling his leg ( when he was in utter pain)

    Why we did it? Our family doctor once had discussed how some patients fear in the name of operation and the extent of can kill them. This makes operation failure. I do not know how much percentage calls for this situation because I was too young.

    When you started writing I wasn't expecting appendicitis, I expected some robber robbing her, and she was fear where did she landed herself. And then she will collect all her fear and turn them into courage and wrack them up till they bleed :p I know I am funny :) Good one for not continuing with my imagination and thinking out of the box :D

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    1. Very True Sridevi.... this was more on a humorous note as most of the times we tend to panic under such circumstances....

      But I simply loved your take on it...it was very sweet of you to do that for your brother. I can understand how fear is harmful after I read one article which said that killing an animal leads to its blood becoming poisonous because of fear.

      I tried to bring in a twist here at the end by making it funny...but God! you are funnier than Me in your imagination :D

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  3. You have combined the crime seen with Operation theatre seen.:-o Your imagination is running really like a horse now ;). I admire it a lot.
    Nice and short. In the first read I was confused but later got it completely.

    Keep it up :)

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    1. Thank God! And I got scared thinking last week you have managed to get a hang of my writings!!

      Thanks for those lovely words:)

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  4. :) he he he ok sorry sorry I burst out laughing at the last few words ..

    This brought a memory , its is so horrific i tell you to go under the knife, I too had a similar experience and it was nothing serious just a normal routine but I thought i would not wake up

    Bikram's

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    1. You dont need to be sorry at all Bikram..that was intended while writing this. I am glad I could make you laugh :)

      Oh! you are right... going under the knife is actually very scary..and the thought of not waking up worse!!

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  5. It was a googly...I also smiled as I finished reading it:) Short & nice!:)

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    1. :D

      Thanks - glad to know it worked! I was a bit skeptical about writing this way!

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  6. Dear Me,
    Those opening lines could take this short story in so many directions. My imagination was already thinking the worse. I'm glad it was just an appendicitis and nothing more sinister. I'm not a fan of hospitals as it is having spent way too much time there last year! You're very good...I can never write such short stories. :-( Thanks for sharing.

    I'm sorry you couldn't linkup to this month's Blog Hop Saturday! Since you expressed such a huge interest, I've gone ahead & added you as a latecomer so now you too can have fun hopping with the rest of us (smile). Have a great week ahead and stay dry!

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    1. Hello Andy,

      Ya...the opening lines are truly misleading.. and thats what happens that by the time we are in the 3/4 th line we have already formed an opinion about what it is going to be and is leading where... I am glad I could create that twist without making it sound so lame.

      Oh yes stays at hospitals are worse and this is exactly how I feel when I surrounded by those masked people :D

      There is no magic here dear, I just saw this type and wanted to try my hand...and Here I am! I am sure you can also do that with the lovely stories, letters and poems that you always conjure!

      Lastly thank you sooooooooo much for linking Me up, will check out all the other ones too soon :D ( Smiling ear to ear)

      Wishing you a wonderful day ahead !

      TC

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  7. First time here. I enjoy such short fiction! Is this a 55-worder? Following you.

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    1. Welcome here!

      Yes it is 55 fiction :)

      Thanks so much!

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  8. ahem, where is the follow button?!

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    1. :D

      Its the 4th option on your right... I have actually renamed that button as My encouragement because for Me, thats what it is... hope you have not difficulty in joining it!

      Thanks in advance for the follow!! :)

      Hoping to see you here more often...

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  9. Hey me, we seem to have some invisible connection in the minds....see this http://www.jaishwrites.blogspot.sg/2012/08/f55-ghastly-sight.html I wrote this a month ago :D Good One :)

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    1. Oh wow Jaish!!

      Two different story lines, written by two different people, one style- 55 fiction and the underlying thought is so so so similar.

      We do really seem to have a deep connection because I think we have had this instance more than once :)

      A hi-5 for that dear!!

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  10. Nice little twist in the tale. Loved it!

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  11. Such less words and such huge emotions! That is what your posts are all about Me. I'm trapped in loads of work these days, reading this short, crisp and profound post surely gave me a bit of inner relaxation. You're growing as you're writing and I can see that! :)

    Loved it! :)

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    1. Hey Leo!

      I thought as much as I truly missed your lovely comments in this blogging world:)

      And as always your comment makes Me smile! Your constant encouragement truly means a lot... Thanks so much for such a wonderful comment.

      Hope things are great at your end...happy working!

      TC

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    1. Hello Kapil, glad you liked it!

      Thanks for being here today:)

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  13. Totally unexpected twist in the ending. I totally imagined something else :D
    I hate hospitals and the irony? My mom is a doctor. *slaps forehead*

    :D

    <3

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    1. :D

      Thanks!

      Oopsss...thats truly ironical. Now that kind of calls for another 55 fiction...doesn't it? ;)

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    2. Haha sure another 55 fiction! Would love to read it :D :)

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    3. Done - will let you know once I am able to conjure something!

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  14. ha ha ha.. :) good one..keep writing.

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  15. Sometimes the getting trapeed is for our good also...as in this case...it's not that every time something wrong has to happen :)

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    1. Yesss and that is what we think every time- that we are trapped while actually we are not :)

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  16. Wooh! I seriously didn't get this at first. Reading the comments unblocked my mind :D
    Differently nice!

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    1. :D

      LOLzzz I had heard that 55 fiction can always be interpreted in more than one ways!

      Thanks.

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