An isolated fragment



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Spicy Saturday This post has been selected as Spicy Saturday Pick this week!


Sneha entered her room and switched on the lights. She glanced around and smiled as she saw things were in the same place as she had left. Off late her mother had taken to spying on her. “Spying” just the thought of that word made her cringe. “How could she do this to me…. She needs to trust me!” she wondered as she dumped her school bag on the chair and switched on her computer. 

She logged into her mail box and saw 24 new mails in her inbox. She scrolled through them eagerly. “Finally…” she exclaimed when her eyes fell on one mail with the subject Hey. She opened it hurriedly and started reading.

Hey… hope everything is doing great with you. I have been missing you terribly and cannot wait for the next weekend to meet you! I know you have asked me not to call you hence I am just sending you this mail. Do reply by a mail or call me if possible before we meet…. Loads of love

She smiled as she re-read the mail again and felt,” It is so sweet of him to have written this mail especially after the way mom had behaved with him.” She was shocked to see her otherwise sweet and docile mom react the way she had on that day. Sneha remembered that day when she was talking to him on phone one evening and narrating one funny incident that had happened at the school. Suddenly her mom came stomping towards her and snatched the phone from her hands. She started yelling at him telling him to keep away from Sneha as he was not doing any good to her. Sneha was dumbstruck as she tried to understand what made her mom react like this. The more she argued the more angry her mom got and in the end this discussion led to Sneha being grounded at home for almost a week. Even remembering that incident made Sneha angrier! She shook her head and clicked on reply as she began typing a mail to him.

Hey… yup everything is good with me. Hope the same with you. I know mom freaked out that day I don’t know why and she has grounded me for the entire week as a punishment. I am really sorry for all that she said to you. It is really sweet of you to think of sending this mail to me even after all that. I thought you would stop talking to me.  :(

I don’t know why she is so angry on me for talking to you. She knows you so well since so many years. I wish I could make her understand or rather understand what she is thinking. I just don’t feel I am going to be in college next year. The way she treats me off late I could be very well in kindergarten.

BTW I hope you remember the gift I had asked you to get for me the next time we meet!! Will try to call you sometime soon before we meet next weekend.

Missing you a lot Da..

Just as Sneha was typing the last word she heard her mom scream behind her.” Sneha….!!..... what on earth do you think are you doing? How many times have I told you not to speak to him?”

Sneha was jolted by her sudden outburst. ‘Why don’t you understand Mom… I have told you I like talking to him… why should I stop doing that?’

‘Sneha how many times do we need to go through the same story again and again?’

‘As many number of times that I need to tell you that a piece of paper cannot change things for me!!’ saying this Sneha turned back to complete her mail:

Missing you a lot Dad.
Love
Sneha

She finished typing and clicked on send.

P.S: This is an isolated fragment of my imagination where one is trying to grab both the things but in the end is left empty handed. By narrating this piece I am not advocating for or against divorces. I totally respect the decisions that make two people take this step. I understand just the way people come together, fall in love and get married, the same way they fight, not get-along and decide to get divorced too. 

But I also understand that a child has to go through a lot sometimes for no fault of theirs. Having to choose between either of the parents is perhaps the harshest punishment that can be given to a child. Sometimes the parents themselves are hapless as they are also going through a lot themselves because of which they fail to notice what a child goes through because of their actions and reactions. Perhaps it’s nobody’s fault. Perhaps it’s everybody’s fault. As of now I thought from a child’s perspective and wrote this. Maybe sometime later will write from their perspective as well!



Comments

  1. VERY well written. I especially love the moment of revelation that shakes up the entire perspective. :) (Who wouldn't?)

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    1. Thanks IQ...I am glad you loved that moment! You need to believe Me when I say I dreamt this last night :/

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    2. :O You dreamt it. & I totally believe you - I'm famous for my vivid dreams also (among my friends) :D

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    3. Ha.. I did. He he.. you are? For Me this is the first time I dreamt something so clearly that I remembered it even till the last P.S.

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  2. Wonderful story with moral.

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  3. It's a haunting read. I agree with IQ, who can not help be appreciate the moment.

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    1. Thank you so much Brenda... "haunting" is perhaps the best compliment :)

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  4. As I read your post I thought it was a typical story of a girl and boy but that end took me by surprise. I am a single mom but I know I will never stop my son from seeing and meeting his father. In all these messy divorces it is the children that are most affected if parents do not behave in a more mature manner.

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    1. In the last line you said it all Rimly. I completely agree with you. Even without divorces I have seen cases where parents don't get along as a result of which they force their kids to be opinionated about the other parent. The child grows up in a very confused state of mind because of all this and also cannot respect his /her parents due to this. The "surprise" was intentional!

      Thanks for stopping by :)

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  5. Wow! The ending totally took me by surprise!
    Very wonderful writing Me. It's very true that it is the child who suffers more through a divorce. I've seen it in my family, it was an ugly divorce. The buy is six now, he's VERY introverted.
    Love you Me!

    P.S: I saw your mail! LOVELY, BEAUTIFUL and totally CUTE are the words :* I'll text you on Friday Me. Flu not going :'(

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    1. :) Thanks so much dear! Oh it is really sad to hear about that child. I can really understand what he must be going through.

      Love you a loads... <3

      P.S: Thanks.. same here... you tc and get well soon!

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  6. This is called a master piece. And your imagination is looking out of the window now ;).
    WOW !! this is the first word comes to my mind. Short, self-complete and touchy. This is what people would like to read.

    I can connect things more now because of certain things known. Indeed the post is really among of the best posts I have read so far. Image goes well with the story. Coming back to the story, oh my you will not let me guess what is going to be :P. really in b/w I thought the same but gave the thought. You really know when to turn the story.

    Sneha's character is the most attractive to Me because of some reasons ;). I can understand her dilemma and her emotions attached.

    P.S: Why you have written this long P.S. Was it so necessary to write ? :-o

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    1. :)

      OMG! I am pinching myself.. Am i really reading this from you - the official critic of my blog ?? If this is true then I am sure my writing has definately improved a lot!

      Well... you remember na we are playing a game - who gets it better- you or me? And yes I hate losing :)

      It feels nice that you could feel Sneha's dilemma and emotions attached well for that is what I intended to do.

      P.S: Yes.....I have written it for I thought it was needed. I want to write about divorce from a woman's perspective also maybe later. Moreover none of the three parties involved are completely wrong or right.

      This is just one angle. I don't want to sound judgmental about my views on this issue. Rather by this P S I meant I am willing to look at all the other POVs this issue might have.

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  7. What an unexpected twist to your ending, Me, and what a beautifully rendered story! Your characters and their interactions were absolutely believable.

    And, yes, my own children went through divorce. I tried my level best to never keep them from knowing or being with their dad, and never spoke badly about him in front of them, though there were times I had to bite my tongue. It is harder on children than anyone thinks, and parents really have to remember this when trying to raise them in separate households. I hope your story will reach many of those parents . . .
    Blessings, my friend!

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    1. That is exactly my point Martha... many times parents feel they know the best and take decisions while actually the child is left with nothing but confusion and bitterness. I really appreciate your efforts in doing this consciously for your children.

      Yes it is harder on children for their understanding about all this is much much naive. I hope those parents are listening :)

      Thank you so much Martha for your wishes!

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  8. Wow I was surprised at the end of this.At first I thought maybe it had to do with some kind of online relationship the daughter had formed. Very nice twist! Sad though.

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    1. Yes Jessica it is sad but a reality that sometimes parents tend to oversee in trying to keep their views and opinions. Thanks for stopping by and dropping such a lovely comment :)

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  9. You know what it was a master piece...Now i am eager to read all your blogs...let's see how soon/Late i complete on my new hobby...!!!

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    1. :)

      Wow! That is the only thing that comes to my mind after reading your comment... Would love to hear your views on my posts anytime!

      Thanks so much.:))

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  10. You have subtly conveyed a profound thought yaar ME. When I started to read, I thought, its a pre-teen love story, but then the way the suspense was handled...as ghanchakkar said- WOW:)
    Have you read the book CUSTODY by Manju Kapur. It's an awesome read,too emotional, but the way Manju has weaved the whole court proceedings, the turmoil of the kids and the parents, is commendable.

    And yes, the sad part is the children are torn between their parents, clueless...they spend their lives...trying to answer that one question.."Why ME???"

    HUH

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    1. Gayu.... you need to believe me if I say I dreamt all this and I don't know why. It was all there you know right from the start to the P.S...kind of eerie but I just had to type it out :)

      Custody by Manju Kapoor happens to be one of my favourites and yes its heart wrenching to read what happens to those two children. And "Why me?" wala question sadly does not have any answer at all!

      Thank you so so so so much for this lovely feedback here and on FB <3

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    2. You loved Custody...even me:) I am still with the characters of your story...still thinking...
      Will there ever be a solution to this...??? are all marriages perfect...??? What is it that couples expect???
      Marriage is the only relationship where we can divorce and leave the partner.
      We adjust with our Parents, friends and even siblings...but then for each his own..we can't generalise

      This story is the best you have written so far.
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      Gayu

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    3. There cannot be A solution to this dear..sadly until each one of those children grow up and realise how much it hurts, where it hurts and understand that they need to not give that hurt to someone else.

      You know giving birth to a child is a responsibility and taking such decisions without making them capable enough to deal with it is wrong.Adjust and accommodate have started loosing their significance with independence and space taking up more importance.

      Thanks once again dear.... loads of love to you too <3

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  11. Sorry for being MIA all this while...haven't been able to catch up on all your post...The end was amazing here...i really didn't see it coming :D
    I loved the note you added in the end..truly...it is the innocent kids who suffer the most in a messy divorce.
    And CONGRATS for featuring on spicy Saturday picks :D FINALLY after all the wait !!!! :)

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    1. Wow!!You literally came back with a BANG!!!! :D

      Thank you so much for such a wonderful news... Yuppie... after all the wait... and at a perfect timing.

      No issues dear for the MIA act I can totally understand. Thank you so much for loving the note and the post !

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  12. Very beautifully written. I liked how you weaved the entire story. And congrats for spicy saturday :)

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  13. yayyyyyyyyyyyy congrats on the spicy pick Excellent WELL DONE

    I am sorry I ma late but I dont get email notifications of new posts and I always come and find so many new posts you have written .. I will try again to follow you :)


    it is so sad when kids have to suffer because tow people made mistakes the so called adults could not mend their ways ..

    Bikram's

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    1. Thank you sooooooooo much Bikram :)

      Oho... late or early does not matter...what matters is you are here!

      Yes it is true children have to suffer the most in all the decisions taken by adults.

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  14. This post deserved to be there ME congrats:)
    Keep writing more short stories..:)

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    1. Thanks so much Gayu... words like yours push me to write more and more!

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    2. Arey I am selfish..you write more...and I can read more
      Samjhi:P right now no ther time pass na:D

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    3. Hmmm samjhi ;)

      *scratching brains for new ideas*

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  15. Agree completely that divorces do have an effect on a child's Psyche and sometimes for no fault of theirs.Beautiful post!!

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    1. Yes , it is a very sad thing but true!

      Thanks a ton...:)

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  16. The moment of revelation had to be, "Missing you, dad." Beautifully done. And you are right. Difficult though it may be, it is best for the kids to have access (without any guilt) to both parents after a messy divorce.

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    1. Yes that is what each parent needs to understand and respect.

      Thanks so much KayEm for being here and leaving such a lovely comment :)

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  17. I must say, the ending was just amazing. Nobody would've expected it coming. A very nice story Me. :D Actually, so was the message and the way it was delivered. And knowing that it came from a dream gives it a whole new, different, feel.

    As it happens, whenever I land on your blog I read something really wonderful. Still, why do I not come here often will always remain a suspense, for me. :/

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    1. :)

      Thanks so much Usama, even I was surprised the way this came up in the dream.

      I am glad to read that you read something wonderful every-time you are here and its always a pleasure to have you here with your wonderful comments!

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  18. u r quite a story teller....very well written.

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    1. Glad you loved it, Thanks so much for stopping by :)

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  19. do i need to tell you...that i got inspired from this blog...to read all your posts?

    you are wonderful writer...and the way you are writing that day won't be far when you will be known for your writing more than anything else...

    Continue with the good job...:)

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    1. Wow!

      It was really touching to read this. Though I cannot say my each blog post is as stupendous as this one but yes this one is very very special for me.

      Thank you so much for all those lovely words. I can just say AMEN for that is my only wish - to me known for my work more than anything else. I don't want name or fame, success or wealth. I just want to know my words made a difference, touched a heart and left a smile somewhere :)

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    2. That's personality of your's make your writing a worth...a person who doesn't want fame,success or wealth but to be known for her words...who can touch a heart and lave a smile...!!!

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  20. woah, the climax was surprising.....your new follower and fan :)

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    1. :)

      Thanks so much, truly appreciate the same!

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  21. This is one of my favourite posts Privy. The child is undergoing a lot for no fault of hers. Feel sad that two adults bicker, who themselves are embroiled into deeper problems. Giving birth to a child is a colossal responsibility ,

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    1. This happens to be one of my favourites too though my ultimate favourite is A post returned undelivered. There are some posts here which I have written and they are extremely close to my heart. This being one of them....

      And I completely agree with you... thanks so much dear!

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  22. I came here straight from Rahul's interview of you...amazing piece man..and I can see why it's ur favorite!

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    1. Wow... thank you so much the little princess :)

      I love your name BTW!

      And thanks so much for stopping by.

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